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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table shows the Proportions of Pupils Attending Four Secondary School Types Between Between 2000 and 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table shows the Proportions of Pupils Attending Four Secondary School Types Between Between 2000 and 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
#minutes #proportions #pupils #four #school #summarise #information #features #comparisons
The table depicts
about
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how many
students
 attending school grouped by 4 different types of Secondary
School
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Schools
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 from 2000 and 2009. Generally, the
pupils
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number of pupils
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that
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apply
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studying in Community
Schools
had
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has
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 been increasing
through out
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throughout
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 the year.
While
,
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apply
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 the other three
schools
 had been decreasing
of
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their
students
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student's
students'
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application
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applications
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. Most of the
students
 are interested
to
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in
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 joining Community
Schools
, the number had
been
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apply
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noticeable
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noticeably
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 rose until it
peak
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peaked
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 in 2009 with 58
percents
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percent
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from
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of
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 the
overall
students
.
However
, the rest of the
schools
shows
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show
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 that
had
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there had
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 been
lack
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a lack
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 of
application
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applications
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. Specialist
Schools
has
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have
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 the fewest
students
above
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all of them,
in
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and
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 each year they always
missed
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miss
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 one
percents
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percent
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 of their
students
. The Grammar
Schools
 and Voluntary-controlled
Schools
had
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have
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 been facing the same situation, but Voluntary-controlled
Schools
 still lead the number which
are
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is
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 more than 8
percents
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percent
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from
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of
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the
Correct article usage
apply
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Grammar
Schools
.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, schools with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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