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The pie charts illustrate the major factors that why people imigrate to and from the UK in 2007.

The pie charts illustrate the major factors that why people imigrate to and from the UK in 2007.
The pie charts illustrate the major factors that
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 people
imigrate
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immigrate
emigrate
migrate
 to and from the UK in 2007.
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, a significant reason for both
immigration
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 and
emigration
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 was
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definite
job
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.
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, formal
job
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 in both pie
chart
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charts
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was
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 quite different, and
in
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emigration
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 was the minority of percentage. In terms of
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definite
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, it comprised around 30%
in
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immigration
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 and
emigration
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 , which was ahead of
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 study which
acounted
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accounted
 for 26%
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immigration
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.
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, it was negligible
porpotion
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portion
proportion
 of
emigration
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 (4%).
Acording
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accompony
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the company
, it was almost a quarter in
immigration
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 and
emigration
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 (15% and 13% respectively). With regard to no reason stated, it stood at 6% in
immigration
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,
athough
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although
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 it made up 18% in
emigration
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, making it higher than
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 in
emigration
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 which was 14% . The
differece
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difference
, in terms of looking for work between
immigration
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emigration
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emigration,
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 was minimal.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words immigration, emigration with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrate" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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