The diagram details the process of making leather products. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram details the process of making leather products.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The illustration describes the process by which leather products are made for retail.
Overall
, it is really apparent that there are three main steps to
this
man-made process, beginning with
transportation
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the transportation
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of the raw material to the
factory
, followed by
preparation
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the preparation
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and processing of the material, and
finally
the production of consumer products.
Firstly
, the animal skins from numerous animals are dried.
Subsequently
, they are taken to a
factory
by trucks, where they are washed in water and lime.
Then
, the skins are soaked in more lime for a period of time before being run through a machine with rollers that flatten them out. At a later time, the flattened skins are soaked in
in
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tannin, which
composed
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of water and vegetable matter. Afterwards, they are polished by another small rolling device and moved to another
factory
by lorries. In
this
factory
, the final products are created and available to consumer
shop
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shops
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and people
in
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worldwide.
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