Some government have imposed bans on certain activities deemed dangerous, while others argue that individuals should have the freedom to choose their own activities even if they are risky. Discuss these both views and give your opinion*
Several
activities
that can be damaged to peoples
are restricted by the government. “Imposed bans on certain Fix the agreement mistake
people
activities
” refers to there are some human activities
or bad practices can
be harmful to themselves, and Correct pronoun usage
that can
government
need to Correct article usage
the government
be stopped
those unnecessary Wrong verb form
stop
activities
. As
my personal Change preposition
In
view
there should Add a comma
view,
some
restrictions on some Add a missing verb
be some
activities
in order to protect our community or the generation. In this
essay
I will discuss how important these bans and what are the dangerous Add a comma
essay,
activities
such
as driving after using alcohol
, over speed driving without consideration of speed limits
Firstly
, We can consider about
driving after using Change preposition
apply
alcohol
. When a person take
some Change the verb form
takes
alcohol
in to
the body, gradually the activity speed of our body and thinking speed goes down. Join the words
into
For instance
, The person who drives using alcohol
suddenly if he had to stop
or Wrong verb form
stops
slow
down the Correct subject-verb agreement
slows
vehicle
at the right place or safe area according to
the alcohol
consumption, Correct article usage
the decision
decision making
process has been dropped than normal condition. Add a hyphen
decision-making
Hence
, that person will not be able to stop the vehicle
on
the right place. Change preposition
in
Therefore
, it is important to keep activities
banned.
Secondly
, We can take-up
the speed drive without concern speed limitation established by the government. Some individuals Correct your spelling
take up
specially
Replace the word
especially
youngest
boys and girls are trying to drive very fast. Those drivers have no idea about control of the Correct article usage
the youngest
vehicle
or speed limitation
. If the driver needs to slow down Fix the agreement mistake
limitations
ther
Correct your spelling
their
the
vehicle
suddenly, definitely they can not do it proper
way. Because it is based on the condition, tire condition of the Add an article
the proper
vehicle
and decision making
speed slower than experienced drivers. Add a hyphen
decision-making
Therefore
, it is important to have some restriction
on some Fix the agreement mistake
restrictions
activities
.
Finally
, we can consider about
using high volume music at Change preposition
apply
mid night
it Correct your spelling
midnight
also
restricted activity, but according to
my personal Change preposition
in
view
it is not appropriate for special occasions. For Add a comma
view,
an
example, we are using Correct article usage
apply
high volume
music Add a hyphen
high-volume
in
a special day or special reason. Change preposition
on
Then
we can celebrate that special day unconditionally. Above
restriction should be Add an article
The above
a
flexible Change the article
apply
for
some extent.
Change preposition
to
To conclude
, It is important to have restrictions on some dangerous activities
such
as; driving after using alcohol
, fast
driving Correct word choice
and fast
on the other hand
there should be a
flexibility on Remove the article
apply
restriction
on some Fix the agreement mistake
restrictions
activities
like using high volume
music Add a hyphen
high-volume
in
midnight. In future , there will be a good community in the Change preposition
at
Correct your spelling
country
contry
Correct your spelling
country
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