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The diagram shows a possible future means of home energy production. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram shows a possible future means of home energy production. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
This
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 infographic shows
an information
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information
a piece of information
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 about how to make electricity in the future. From the general overview, it can be seen that it has six steps until it
finally
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 can be used for home
energy
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. First and foremost, the compost of ferments methane
gas
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consist
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consisting
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 of leaves, food, scraps, etc will be gathered until it
filled
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fills
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 3/4 of
steel
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the steel
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 tank in order to transform the
gas
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 out into a methane
gas
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 storage by using a pipe.
This
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 process will continue to compress all the
gas
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 into the compressor machine until it is suitable enough to get processed by
combustion
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a combustion
the combustion
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 engine. In fact,
this
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 is the
last
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 moment the
gas
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 stays
to
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in
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 its element.
Moreover
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, the combustion engine machine will be the first mechanical process where the
gas
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 becomes
an
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apply
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energy
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.
This
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 engine leads the
gas
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 out through the mechanical process and
change
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changes
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 it into
a
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apply
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mechanical
energy
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 before it enters the generator system. After the mechanical
energy
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 has been generated and changed into an electrical
energy
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 in
generator
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the generator
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 system, it will be allocated into a battery where the whole electric
energy
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 will be saved. More than that, the battery will distribute the electricity from the storage for home usage.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, gas with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • renewable energy
  • sustainability
  • solar panels
  • energy storage
  • wind turbine
  • geothermal
  • energy efficiency
  • carbon footprint
  • grid
  • biomass
  • photovoltaic
  • smart meter
  • energy consumption
  • insulation
  • heat pump
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