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The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph depicts how many
people
 lived
urban
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in urban
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area
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areas
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 in four different Asian countries between 1970 and 2020 and
predict
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predicts
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 the future trend by the
year
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years
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 2030 and 2040.
Overall
, it is said that the proportion of
people
 in
Malaysia
 and Indonesia increased significantly during the whole given period,
while
 there were some fluctuations in
Philippines
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the Philippines
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 and Thailand. In 1970,
Philippines
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the Philippines
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 had the highest percentage of residents
lived
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living
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 in cities and the highest number of citizens in
Malaysia
 will choose to stay in
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the flourish
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flourish
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flourishing
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area
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areas
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 in the year 2040. Looking at the diagram in more
details
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detail
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, at the start of the period, the difference between
Malaysia
 and
Philippines
 was only 2%, with 30% and 32%, respectively. During the following 50 years from 1970, the figure for persons in
Malaysia
 soared to roughly 75%, relatively, there was
also
 an increase in
Philippines
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the Philippines
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 from 1970 to 1990,
while
 it decreased to about 42% by 2010,
then
 it converted to a steady rise until 2040. We can see that there were around 14% and 19%
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of folks
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folks
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of folks
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 in Indonesia and Thailand preferred to have houses in
the
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apply
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large
town
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towns
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,
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and
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however
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and
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 more and more
people
 in the two nations moved to more convenient places in the given period. The percentage of
population
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the population
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 dramatically rose to 50% and it is predicted that it will increase to 60%
as well as
 become the second most
people
lived
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living
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 in the cities.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, malaysia, philippines with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • graph
  • percentage
  • population
  • cities
  • Asian countries
  • 1970
  • 2020
  • predictions
  • 2030
  • 2040
  • estimations
  • urban
  • increasing
  • steadily
  • Japan
  • China
  • rise
  • urbanization
  • South Korea
  • India
  • upward trend
  • slow pace
  • surpass
  • resided
  • projected
  • moderate increase
  • significant surge
  • exceed
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