The chart above shows the percentage of people consuming five servings of fruit and vegetables divided by three categories of men, women and children in the UK between 2001 and 2008.

The chart above shows the percentage of people consuming five servings of fruit and vegetables divided by three categories of men, women and children in the UK between 2001 and 2008.
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The chart above displays information about the proportion of individuals in the UK from 2001 to 2008 who consumed five servings of fruits and vegetables, broken down into three groups: men, women, and children.
Overall
, the amount of people consuming five servings of fruits and vegetables in the UK grew substantially in eight years in three different groups. The children category has been the lowest compared to the other two
since
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2001 till 2008.
Overall
,
this
category grew dramatically from 13% for three years in a row to 17% in 2004 and peaked in 2007 at 26%.
Although
, in 2008 the number slightly falls to 24%.
Then
, in the women's section, the highest was in 2006 with 35% and
also
was the biggest number of all the data. The data reveals the fluctuation between 2001 and 2006.
However
, in 2007 and 2008 the number quite decreased to 30% and 29%. In the year between 2001 and 2003, the percentage of men was maintained at 17%, after that, the data rose steadily from 21% in 2004 to 27% in 2007 and became the highest in
this
group.
While
in 2008 it slightly decreased to 25%.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Consumption
  • Servings
  • Nutritional habits
  • Steady increase/decrease
  • Fluctuations
  • Dietary choices
  • Health consciousness
  • Public health campaigns
  • Demographic differences
  • Statistical comparison
  • Healthy lifestyle
  • Year-on-year analysis
  • Gender disparity
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