Rich countries should allow jobs for skilled and knowledgeable employees who are from poor countries. Do you agree or disagree?

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standard
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more precise
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poor
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notions people, who do jobs in
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country
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they are
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amount of money.
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they spend on their
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lifestyle
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transfer
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saving
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to their families
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living
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. it is good for poor
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native
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the rich
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country
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countries
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should give permission to
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worker
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workers
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who
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from too Gdp nations.
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doing
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country
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will increase.
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Make sure to provide a clear introduction, stating your opinion directly on the given topic. The introduction should engage with the topic and outline the main points that will be discussed in the essay.
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Develop each paragraph with a clear topic sentence followed by supporting sentences that expand on the topic. It should be easy for the reader to follow the progression of ideas.
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Provide relevant examples and evidence to support your arguments. This will demonstrate your ability to relate theory to real-world examples and enhance the persuasive power of your essay.
Coherence and Cohesion
Focus on sentence structure and aim for a mix of complex and simple sentences. This will not only improve readability but also demonstrate your linguistic competence.
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Address the counter-argument or potential downsides briefly, explaining why you still maintain your position. This will make your argument more nuanced and compelling.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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