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You recently organised an all-day meeting for your company, which took place in a local hotel. In their feedback, participants at the meeting said that they liked the hotel, but they were unhappy about the food that was served for lunch. Write a letter to the manager of the hotel. In your letter • say what the participants liked about the hotel • explain why they were unhappy about the food suggest what the manage� should do to improve the food in future

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Dear Sir or Madam,
Last
 week I organised a meeting on Monday for a
compleet
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 day in your hotel from morning
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 the night for my company ;
however
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 in your hotel was perfect there was a point that I like to share with you in order to improve your services.Our participants and some of our
collegues
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colleagues
 generally liked your local
accomodation
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accommodation
 and enjoyed the environment dramatically which was designed with local material and combined with folk music as well.
On the other
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 they faced
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a problem with their meals , they had just one option to eat for lunch which was a hot and spicey sea food with a low quality in cooking. should the manager check the
queesins
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queens
 and taste them before the order and put more attention on the restaurant kitchen , the food service will be improved.
Sencierly
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Sincerely
 Yours, Jack Adams
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Structure
Provide clear paragraphing with distinct introduction, body, and conclusion sections. Ensure that each paragraph contains a single idea or point.
Cohesion
Use a range of linking words and phrases to connect ideas more cohesively and provide smooth transitions between sentences and paragraphs.
Content
Address all three bullet points in the task more fully, with each point expanded into a developed paragraph for greater task achievement.
Accuracy
Check spelling and punctuation to reduce grammar errors and improve clarity of the writing.
Grammar
Use varied sentence structures to showcase a range of grammatical forms.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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