The bar chart gives information about the percentage of workers in different sectors of employment in three countries at different stages of economic development.

The bar chart gives information about the percentage of workers in different sectors of employment in three countries at different stages of economic development.
The bar chart compares the proportion of employees in different categories of employment in three countries.
Overall
, working in the service
sector
is the most popular choice for Japanese and
Brazilian
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,
which
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both account for at least half of their working population. In terms of employment in Brazil, the proportion of distribution in the agricultural
sector
is as same as in the industrial
sector
, representing nearly 25% of each
sector
.
Furthermore
, half of Brazil's employees are distributed in the service
sector
.  To examine the data clearly, in Japan, the percentage of workers in the service
sector
remain
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as
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the largest group, with 60% of the workforce, followed by the industrial
sector
and the agricultural
sector
, with roughly 30% and shy of 7% respectively. 
In contrast
, most of the
Indian
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Indians
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, with accounting for approximately 60% of the working population, engage in the agricultural
sector
.
Whereas
, the industrial
sector
remains the least preferred option, representing nearly one in ten of the workforce.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bar chart
  • percentage
  • workers
  • sectors of employment
  • economic development
  • overview
  • comparison
  • three countries
  • stages
  • change
  • impact
  • differences
  • reasons
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