The pie chart shows the amount of money that a children's charity located in the USA spent and received in one year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
The provided chart presented
spending
and Correct article usage
the spending
income
of a children’s charity
based in the US in 2016.
In general, in terms of Use synonyms
the
revenue sources, the organization received money the most from donated food and the smallest Correct article usage
apply
source
were investment Fix the agreement mistake
sources
income
and grants from Use synonyms
government
. Meanwhile, from the expenditures, the biggest portion was given to program services and the least amount of it was
allocated to management and general.
Add an article
the government
To begin
with, the Linking Words
income
of the organization was Use synonyms
got
from donated food, as
the biggest contributor with 86.6%. Meanwhile, Verb problem
obtained
the
community contributions and program revenue took the second and the third position with 10.4% and 2.2% respectively. Correct article usage
apply
However
, other Linking Words
income
gave Use synonyms
the
smaller portion which are
0.4% and the smallest percentage of sources were gained from investment Correct article usage
a
income
and government grants with 0.2% from each.
Use synonyms
On the other hand
, the expenses of the charity were allocated for three
aspects, in which 95.8% of Linking Words
money
was spent Add an article
the money
for
program services, making it Change preposition
on
as
the biggest expenditure. Meanwhile, the second biggest expense went to
fundraising with 2.6% followed by management and general as the smallest expense with 1.6%.Change preposition
apply
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