The pie chart shows the amount of money that a children's charity located in the USA spent and received in one year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The pie chart shows the amount of money that a children's charity located in the USA spent and received in one year.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The provided chart presented
spending
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the spending
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and
income
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of a children’s charity based in the US in 2016. In general, in terms of
the
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apply
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revenue sources, the organization received money the most from donated food and the smallest
source
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sources
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were investment
income
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and grants from
government
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the government
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. Meanwhile, from the expenditures, the biggest portion was given to program services and the least amount of it was allocated to management and general.
To begin
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with, the
income
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of the organization was
got
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obtained
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from donated food, as the biggest contributor with 86.6%. Meanwhile,
the
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community contributions and program revenue took the second and the third position with 10.4% and 2.2% respectively.
However
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, other
income
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gave
the
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a
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smaller portion which are 0.4% and the smallest percentage of sources were gained from investment
income
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and government grants with 0.2% from each.
On the other hand
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, the expenses of the charity were allocated for three aspects, in which 95.8% of
money
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the money
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was spent
for
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on
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program services, making it
as
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apply
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the biggest expenditure. Meanwhile, the second biggest expense went to fundraising with 2.6% followed by management and general as the smallest expense with 1.6%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words income with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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