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The two maps below show the changes that have taken place in the town of Westley since 1815. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The two maps below show the changes that have taken place in the town of Westley since 1815. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The maps depict information about the development in the
town
 of Westley, between approximately
twenty one
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 decades ago and presently.
Overall
, it is noticeable that there are a lot of changes.
While
 there
were
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 a lot more agricultural sector in Westley in the past, there are a lot less greenery areas and there has been built both amenities and public facilities now. In 1815, there were many fields located
to
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in
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 the southwest areas of the
town
.
However
,
this
 area has been converted into
cinema
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a cinema
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.
Likewise
, Lenton Woods which
were
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 originally cultivated near
to
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apply
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the
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apply
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Lake Lenton
have
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has
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 been transformed into Lenton Housing Estate. Other amenities that have been
build
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built
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 are
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a sport
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sport
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center
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centre
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 and
shopping
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a shopping
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center
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centre
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closed
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close
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 to the
housings
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housing
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.
Furthermore
,
new
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a new
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 railway as one of
public
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the public
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 facilities has been built
to
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in
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 the western areas of the
town
 these days. It is
also
 interesting to note that
either
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neither
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market square
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Market Square
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or
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nor
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town
 hall
have not
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has
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 faced any change at all.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words town with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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