The chart shows the unemployment situation in Australia in the year 2012.

The data below illustrates the percentage of unemployment in two different

areas

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, rural and urban, in Australia in

the

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2012.

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first

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thing that we can notice from the chart is that

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rural

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has

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fluctuating

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, but still

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downward

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trend throughout the

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period, meanwhile the proportion of unemployed citizens in urban

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had

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upward

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trend. It is interesting to note that, rural

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, in the

first

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quarter

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, had the highest rate of unemployment. Unlike

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urban

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, which had the highest percentage after the 4th

quarter

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, and in the

first

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quarter

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had the lowest rate, but for rural

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the situation is different.

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areas

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had the lowest rate after

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the 4th

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quarter

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. Now turning to details, both

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has

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fluctuating data, but

still

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we can see exactly where

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an increase and decrease.

Also

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, urban

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had the same percentage of unemployment in

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first

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and 3rd

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quarter

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