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Two weeks ago you bought a radio from a local branch of a well-known chain of shops. It did not work properly. The shop took it back and said they would repair it. You have waited a week and it is still not ready. Write a letter to the shop. In your letter say what has happened and how you feel ask them to explain why there has been a delay ask them to repair the radio very quickly or to supply you with a new radio You should write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

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Dear Sir/Madam I am writing
this
 letter to get some information about the damaged
radio
 which
i
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 had
gave
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 it to you a week ago. It was about a couple of weeks back, when
i
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 got
this
radio
 from your shop. When
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 took it, the device was functioning properly but after some time, it was not going
well
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 as it should be.
This
 was because,
while
 playing
this
radio
,
unfortunately
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 my wife
has
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dropped it into the water. From that time it just stopped and
i
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 was really not happy with
this
 incident.
However
,
i
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 know that it was my fault, but
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according to
 the policy of customer service can you please
atleast
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at least
 let me know why it is taking so long
.
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 After 5 days there's a party in my house so can you please fix it as soon as possible or can you please replace it with the new
radio
 so it won't make a
hault
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halt
fault
 in the event. Yours friendly customer Jay Chawla
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coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph presents a clear main idea and sticks to that idea without deviation or repetition.
coherence cohesion
Start with a clear introduction about the purpose of your letter. Then, organize the content into paragraphs, with each paragraph dealing with a different aspect of the issue.
coherence cohesion
Finish with an appropriate sign-off that matches the tone of the rest of the letter. 'Yours friendly customer' could potentially be 'Yours sincerely' to maintain formality.
task achievement
Make sure to directly address all the points presented in the task to ensure a complete response. This includes saying how you feel, asking for an explanation of the delay, and requesting a speedy repair or replacement.
task achievement
Maintain a polite and formal tone throughout the letter considering the context and recipient. Avoid informal language or slang.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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