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Write about the following topic: In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Having fast and stable transport systems can play a vital role in
prosperity
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 of countries. Some believe that building rapid
rail roads
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railroads
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 can boost
traffic
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the traffic
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of
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population and goods between cities,
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 contributing to their mutual development. Another
oppinion
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opinion
 is that government funds should be invested in existing transport
infrustructure
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infrastructure
 that has proven to be effective
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throughout
 the years. In my
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 I will go over both of these points of view and suggest one based on my knowledge of the subject.
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, constructing new railway lines in regions where none exist is always a good idea because it helps connect the population with industrial
centers
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, ports and airports. The less time people spend on travel, the more effective is their work.
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, railways are one of the cheapest ways to transport goods and people, being second only to naval means. So it
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 helps lower the prices in affected areas.
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, railways are easy to set up. With modern
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 it is possible to build tracks almost anywhere, including drilling tunnels under mountains and constructing bridges over water. The only limitation is the cost of building them in some areas. But in the long run, railroads are usually worth the initial investment. There is
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 another
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opinion
, that money could be better spent improving existing infrastructure. It is often hard to calculate the economic impact of building new railways and pretty straightforward to examine the current flow of goods and people. Using
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 information, data-driven decisions can be made to widen roads, upgrade train tracks or expand airports, and the effect of these actions can be calculated beforehand with great accuracy.
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, from my experience, I found it very convenient to travel between distant cities at speeds
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 than 500 km/h.
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 why I consider rapid railroads the future of
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 transportation and believe that more of them should be constructed all over the world.
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introduction
Ensure to introduce the topic clearly by paraphrasing the essay question. Make your stance evident from the beginning.
main points
Work on developing clear topic sentences for each paragraph that precisely reflect the main ideas you plan to discuss.
cohesion
Use a range of linking devices effectively to connect ideas and paragraphs. Avoid excessive repetition of conjunctions like 'Firstly', 'Secondly'.
examples
Try to support your main points with specific examples or evidence to strengthen your arguments.
conclusion
Conclude by summarizing the main points and reiterating your opinion in a clear and concise manner.
task response
Balance the development of both sides of the argument before giving your opinion to ensure full task achievement.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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