The charts below show the percentage of male and female worker in country A and country B. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentage of male and female worker in country A and country B. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the gender percentage of employees in
countryies
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countries
A and B.
Overall
, it can be seen that the
Service
sector is the majority of people
do
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in
two
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countries for all males and females.
To begin
with
Country
A, the number of workers who work in
service
is a significant amount for males at 56%,
thus
, followed by agriculture at half the proportion of
service
at around 29%.
However
, female employees have similar
service
and agriculture numbers, accounting for 49% and 43%, respectively.
Furthermore
, the Industrial sector from
Country
A at the lowest population for men and women at 15% and 8%,
correspondingly
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. Considering
to
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Country
B, the data shows that
Service
takes the majority of the the worker population at 65% for males and 88% for females.
Moreover
, the Industrial sector is the second number, at nearly half the
the
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proportion from
service
for men, and just less than one-fifth for women,
hence
, Agriculture have a very small portion of
workers
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occupation
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in that
country
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words service, country with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • workforce
  • percentage
  • male-dominated
  • female-dominated
  • sector
  • industry
  • disparity
  • proportion
  • predominance
  • statistical
  • trend
  • comparison
  • economically active
  • gender gap
  • labor market
  • employment rate
  • significant
  • minority/majority
  • contrast
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