The charts below show the percentage of male and female worker in country A and country B. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the gender percentage of employees in
countryies
A and B. Correct your spelling
countries
Overall
, it can be seen that the Service
sector is the majority of people do
in Unnecessary verb
apply
two
countries for all males and females.
Correct article usage
the two
To begin
with Country
A, the number of workers who work in service
is a significant amount for males at 56%, thus
, followed by agriculture at half the proportion of service
at around 29%. However
, female employees have similar service
and agriculture numbers, accounting for 49% and 43%, respectively. Furthermore
, the Industrial sector from Country
A at the lowest population for men and women at 15% and 8%, correspondingly
.
Considering Rephrase
respectively
to
Change preposition
apply
Country
B, the data shows that Service
takes the majority of the the worker population at 65% for males and 88% for females. Moreover
, the Industrial sector is the second number, at nearly half the the
proportion from Remove the redundancy
apply
service
for men, and just less than one-fifth for women, hence
, Agriculture have a very small portion of workers
Change noun form
workers'
worker's
occupation
in that Fix the agreement mistake
occupations
country
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Vocabulary: Replace the words service, country with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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