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Domestic and international Investment will not grow as the
pandemic
will affect the countries with a
pandemic
. Economic growth is accompanied by changes in the structure of the economy. When there is a disease outbreak, new firms will not have opportunities to establish themselves, as
banks
will not be able to loan them
money
.
Moreover
,
banks
may face a crisis,
for example
, the US
banks
had given large numbers of mortgages to low-income households on deals that fixed low repayments for a few years. During the
pandemic
, many would not be able to afford the repayments and
banks
may be bundling mortgages together and selling packages of mortgages to other
banks
or investors. Market failure in the
labour
market will
also
deepen the crisis.
For example
, the UK's National Health Service (NHS) has a deepening shortage of nurses.
This
means that hospitals face a shortage of manpower, when the
pandemic
strikes, medical teams may not be able to handle all the patients which causes an
increase
in the death rate and deepens the economy.
Therefore
, the
government
should seriously build more nursing schools and financially support prospective nurse students to mitigate
pandemic
effects. Artificial limits occupation's
labour
supply,
for example
, the introduction of lessen entry requirements can help in the
labour
force.
Therefore
,
government
regulations for foreign
labour
may
increase
the
labour
force,
thus
, increasing economic growth.
Moreover
, the
government
needs to spend more
money
to combat the virus
such
as temporary medical stations, medications and research to solve the epidemic.
This
even worsens the
government
’s budget and may even create a deficit.
Therefore
, the
government
may need to
increase
the
money
supply in order to cope with the economic challenges.
Such
as the United States of America, quantitative easing may
increase
the
money
supply and help the economy in the short run. I
also
learned that country like Singapore, fiscal policy to subsidy citizens with monetary terms is helping them to withstand the
pandemic
in the short term. As
such
, unwinding the monetary stimulus will not be possible as the
pandemic
may be a long-term issue. I acknowledge that it is very important to rely on my own knowledge and express my thoughts from the fundamentals I learned during the lectures. Without much attention in class, I may not be able to fulfil the discussion and complete the task
as
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ease. As I was a timid and shy girl, open discussion was not my cup of tea.
However
, through the journey, I now understand that expressing my thoughts is becoming a rewarding experience. Having
courage
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to express my
idea
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,
knowledge
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and
applying
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it is
affirmative
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learning experience
whcih
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that
I may use
such
skills in the future when in my career days.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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