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The plan below shows the village of Pebbleton 20 years ago and now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

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The plans above illustrate the
village
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 of the city named Pebbleton 2 decades ago and nowadays.
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, the main changes to the
village
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is
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 the addition and removal of some buildings and facilities in the area. 20 years ago, Pebbleton was a small
village
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 with a limited number of houses. The facilities were quite simple, with the lighthouse on the north, a film studio on the
south west
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southwest
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, a playing field on the south and the old
fort
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road
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 running through the island.
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, there was a
road
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 called lighthouse
road
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 that connected the residential area and the old
fort
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road
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. The
village
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 was separated
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 the continent by a river. On the continent side, there was a
coastroad
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coast road
 running along the river and a school. And the island was connected to the ground via a
roadbridge
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road bridge
. After 2 decades, the
village
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 has some changes that we can see today. The biggest change is the addition of houses in the residential area. The old
fort
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 has been replaced by the children's playground and the film studio building has been changed to flats. In the past, there was only one way to cross the river, which was crossing through the
roadbridge
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road bridge
, but now, they added a footpath that connects the old
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fort
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Fort
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road
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 and the coast
road
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. The lighthouse, the playing field and the school remained unchanged.

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task achievement
Ensure that you provide a clear overview in your introduction. While you mentioned the addition and removal of buildings and facilities, it would be helpful to also indicate the significant transformations and any trends that can be identified.
coherence cohesion
Enhance the effectiveness of your main points by using a wider range of cohesive devices and paragraphing to show clear relationships between ideas. This will improve the flow of your essay.
coherence cohesion
For higher marks, consider a more structured approach, where each paragraph focuses on specific changes. Use comparative language to emphasize differences between the past and present.
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In describing the changes, try to use a wider range of vocabulary to avoid repetition and to give more detailed descriptions. This could include synonyms for 'changed' and 'addition,' as well as adjectives to describe the extent of the changes.
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Provide detailed examples to support your points, such as specifying how many more houses there are, or describing the size or features of the new children's playground compared to the old fort.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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