The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries.
The two documents compare in which sectors water is used in the world and how much of it is consumed in
Brazil
and in the Democratic Republic of Congo.
Overall
, it is clear that
the element has mostly been used in the agricultural sector since the year 1900. Furthermore
, there is a more important consumption of the liquid in Brazil
than in the Democratic Republic of Congo.
Indeed, water has been esential
for agriculture since the 1900s, but in the industrial and domestic domains, it has not been used as much. The quantity of it used for the first sector has gone from 500 to 3000 in only 100 years, Correct your spelling
essential
while
for the industrial and domestic domains
it has increased Add a comma
domains,
of
less than 1100 in the same period.
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Moreover
, Brazil
has more irrigated land than the Democratic Republic of Congo. This
factor could explain why the liquid element’s
consumption in Change noun form
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the
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country
is bigger than in Fix the agreement mistake
countries
the
African Correct article usage
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one
. The quantity of irrigated land in Correct pronoun usage
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Brazil
is of
26,500km2 and the quantities consumed per person are Change preposition
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of
359m3. In the other geographical region, the irrigated land is almost 270 times smaller, which explains why the water consumption per person is Change preposition
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of
only 8m3.Change preposition
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