The pie charts below show the devices people in the 18 to 25 age group use to watch television in Canada in two different years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

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The diagrams give a comparison of the device

ownerships

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in the young

adults

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agre

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age

group

to watch

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television in Canada between 2009 and 2019.

Overall

, it can be seen that in 2009, more people

use

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conventional

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ten years later they were more into flat-screen

and mobile

phone

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phones

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To begin

with, in 2009, the number of conventional

and laptop owners

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dominated

this

trend, with 34% and 20% respectively.

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, users of desktop

computer

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computers

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and mobile

phone

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phones

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showed

similar

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proportion, at just below 20% each.

However

, the lowest rates were in the usage of flat-screen

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TVs

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and

tablet

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with only 13% combined together.

On the other hand

, in 2019, there was a significant increase in the percentage of modern

and mobile owners, with around 30% each. Meanwhile, the trend of traditional television

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experienced a dramatic fall of 30%, from 34% to 4%. Even though individuals who used

computer

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and

laptop

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laptops

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were

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decline

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moderately, the amount of tablet users witnessed a level up

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14%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words tv with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.

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