The pie charts below show the devices people in the 18 to 25 age group use to watch television in Canada in two different years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The pie charts below show the devices people in the 18 to 25 age group use to watch television in Canada in two different years.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The diagrams give a comparison of the device
ownerships
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in the young
adults
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agre
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age
group
to watch
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television in Canada between 2009 and 2019.
Overall
, it can be seen that in 2009, more people
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conventional
TV
,
while
ten years later they were more into flat-screen
TV
and mobile
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phones
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.
To begin
with, in 2009, the number of conventional
TV
and laptop owners
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dominated
this
trend, with 34% and 20% respectively.
In addition
, users of desktop
computer
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computers
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and mobile
phone
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phones
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showed
similar
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proportion, at just below 20% each.
However
, the lowest rates were in the usage of flat-screen
TV
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and
tablet
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tablets
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with only 13% combined together.
On the other hand
, in 2019, there was a significant increase in the percentage of modern
TV
and mobile owners, with around 30% each. Meanwhile, the trend of traditional television
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experienced a dramatic fall of 30%, from 34% to 4%. Even though individuals who used
computer
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and
laptop
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laptops
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were
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decline
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moderately, the amount of tablet users witnessed a level up
by
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14%.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.

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