You would like to buy some electrical goods at a shop in a nearby town. Write a letter to the shop and ask if they have the things you want or whether they will be able to order them. Ask what the prices are and how long they will be able to hold the goods for you.

Dear Sir or Madam, I hope
this
letter finds you in good health. My name is Jinal Patel; I live in Unionville which is just five minutes away from your shop. The purpose of my correspondence today is to formally inquire
for
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the availability of Philips Hair Curler. Allow me to elaborate on
this
. I am interested in purchasing
Philips
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the Philips
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Hair Curler in model Xoe, which is very trendy among
the
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social media influencers. So there, If you have
this
product available at your shop,
Please
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let me know. Alternatively, if you do not have
this
product I would like to know if you can order it for me.
Additionally
, I would greatly appreciate it if you could aware me
about
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the price for
this
product, and the duration
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the entire process.
Moreover
, I
also
would like to know for how many days you can hold my order in your store, as currently I am out of state for
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15days
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15 days
. Thank you for your time and attention,
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I look forward to receiving your prompt response.
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Sincerely, Jinal Patel
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Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure each paragraph presents one clear idea and avoid mixing details within the same paragraph to enhance clarity and cohesion.
Task Achievement
Maintain a suitable formal tone throughout your letter; avoid informal expressions or styles that seem out of place in a formal inquiry.
Coherence and Cohesion
Use a variety of cohesive devices and transition words to link ideas across paragraphs and within paragraphs for better readability.
Task Achievement
Clearly state your inquiries and intentions in each paragraph, following the logical flow of explanation, question, and additional request or requirement.
Coherence and Cohesion
Refer back to the recipient directly when making requests, as in 'Could you please inform me...' to make your writing more direct and effective.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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