■The chart below give information on the percentage of British people giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010. ■Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

■The chart below give information on the percentage of British people giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010.

    ■Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
The
given
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apply
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bar graph describes the
detail
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details
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of different
age
group
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groups
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who
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that
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denote
the
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money to needy
people
from 1990 to 2010 in British. Overview, in 1990 the majority of
people
give
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gave
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money to charity
whereas
, in
last
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the last
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two
age
group
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groups
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the data was data for
same
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the same
a same
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time period. As per the provided information that from 18 to 25
age
people
invest money
to
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in
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charity work which calculates above 15% in
former
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the former
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given year and below 5% in
latter
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the latter
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year. Interestingly, the data was almost double in
next
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the next
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age
group
that
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which
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was around 31% and 24% in
respective
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the respective
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given time
period
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periods
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. Approximately 43% and 35%,
British
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of British
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people
give
moeny
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money
to helpless
people
by
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in
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36
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the 36
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to 50
age
group
in 1990 and 2010
orderly
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apply
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. Moving towards
rest
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the rest
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of things
that
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the
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51 to 65
age
group
, give
moeny
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money
to
people
with 35% in 1990 which was 5% more
in
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apply
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last
year. Surprisingly, the percentage of both years was
same
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the same
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that was less than 35%
the
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of the
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people
belong
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belonged
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to senior citizens .
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
Vocabulary: Replace the words age, group, people with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 6 times.
Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 3 times.

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