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The chart below gives information about the growth of urban population in certain parts of the world including the prediction of the future. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about the growth of urban population in certain parts of the world including the prediction of the future. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart presents the percentage of
population
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the population
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 in
whole
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the whole
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 world,
Africa
, Asia and
Latin
America
.
Overall
,
Latin
America
gets
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has
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 the
most
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largest
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population
 and
Africa
gets
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has
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 the
less
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lowest
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population
.
Latin
America
 had more than 40%
population
 in 1950. It went up 30% to 70% in 2000. It is more than
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the whold
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whold
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whole
hold
 world
population
. In 2030,
expectation
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the expectation
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 of
population
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the population
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 in
Latin
America
 will be 80%.
On the other hand
, the
population
 of
Africa
 and Asia got around 12% only in 1950. But there
were
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 a dramatic increase in these 2 places. They
thrible
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thrive
 up to around 38%.
Alought
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Although
 it
still
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is still
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 less than
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the whold
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whold
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whole
world's
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worlds
world
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. In 2030, Asia
expect
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expects
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population
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its population
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 will glow up to 55%, more than
Africa
's 51%.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words population, africa, latin, america with synonyms.
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