The pie charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
The given charts illustrate the percentage of adults 7% followed by going out with friends/family which experienced a decreasing trend as well at 12%.
time consuming
in six different activities in a particular country from 1958 to 2008. Add a hyphen
time-consuming
Overall
, travel to work and sleeping experienced a decreasing trend while
working and other activities remaining
increased in the given period.
As can be seen from the charts, the percentage of adults who spent their Wrong verb form
remained
time
sleeping diminishedChange preposition
by
Conversely
, an uplifting trend occurred in the working category with 9
% increase from 1958 to 2008, and it Correct article usage
a 9
also
ensued in the going out with friends/family and relaxing at home categories; 5% and 13 % respectively. Other interests or playing sports was the least activity which also
increased at only 2 % in the given period.
Generally, most adults spend their time
working and sleeping while
only a little of their time
is allocated to travel to work and other interests.Submitted by misstiasclassroom on
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, while".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words time with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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