The pie charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

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The given charts illustrate the percentage of adults

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time consuming

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in six different activities in a particular country from 1958 to 2008.

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, travel to work and sleeping experienced a decreasing trend

while

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working and other activities

remaining

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increased in the given period. As can be seen from the charts, the percentage of adults who spent their

time

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sleeping diminished

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7% followed by going out with friends/family which experienced a decreasing trend as well at 12%.

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, an uplifting trend occurred in the working category with

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a 9

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% increase from 1958 to 2008, and it

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ensued in the going out with friends/family and relaxing at home categories; 5% and 13 % respectively. Other interests or playing sports was the least activity which

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increased at only 2 % in the given period. Generally, most adults spend their

time

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working and sleeping

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only a little of their

time

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is allocated to travel to work and other interests.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, while".

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words time with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

157 words

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