In recent years, many governments have brought in laws to ban smoking in public places, such as bars, restaurants and offices. To what extend do you agree or disagree with banning smoking in public places?

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In recent times, there has been a significant increase in the number of
people
who smoke. These humans can be witnessed everywhere,
however
, the majority of governments have brought in laws to ban smoking in public locations, which means that
people
can not smoke in places
such
as restaurants and offices. I tend to agree with
this
idea, and in
this
essay, I will support my opinion with examples.
Firstly
, smoking in these areas can harm others. What I mean by
this
is that individuals who are dealing with respiratory diseases,
such
as asthma, would get worse if someone does
this
.
Moreover
,
elderlies
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might get cancer, because they are in their weakest period and anything can affect them quickly.
As a result
, you may cause these humans to die. Another reason is that you limit
people
's freedom. Many are annoyed
of
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by
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smelling
such
drugs, and by doing
this
, you force them to breathe the polluted air.
As a result
, there would be arguments between the sober person and the smoker, which may lead to a fight.
For instance
, in Iran, 40 per cent of the arguments are related to
this
,
according to
news.
However
, some argue that smoking should not be completely banned. They feel that public areas like bars and cafes should have
this
option for smokers.
As a result
,
this
situation would be great for both sobers and smokers. In conclusion, despite the fact that
this
can make some
people
uncomfortable, some feel there
sould
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should
could
be special locations for
this
kind of
people
such
as bars and cafes. In my opinion,
this
thing should be prevented in
such
places in order to decrease the number of them.
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