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The graph shows the amount of money spent on book in Germany, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005.

The graph shows the amount of money spent on book in Germany, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005.
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The line
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 describes the detail of four different
country
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countries
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 which spend
money
 on
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the book
a book
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book
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books
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 from 1995 to 2005. Overview, throughout time, all
nation
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nations
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 show
increasing
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an increasing
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 trend
whereas
, in
Germany
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Germany,
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 people buy
maximum
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more
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 books as compared to
other
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others
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. As per the provided information, in 1995 the
money
 spent on
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book
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books
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 was
hightest
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highest
 in Germany
with
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 $80
millions
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million
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,
however
least
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the least
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 was Austria with 30 US
dollars
millions
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million
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, and interestingly,
France
 and Italy spent
same
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 amount around $55
millions
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million
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. In 1997 and 1999 the
raising
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rising
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 trend
was show
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 in the amount of
money
 which
spent
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was spent
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 on books in Germany and Austria with $90
millions
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million
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 and $40
millions
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million
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 orderly. The
money
 spent on books was
same
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the same
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 in
France
 and Italy in 1997 which was calculated
$
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at $
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56
millions
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million
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, after the gap of 2
year
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years
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 the difference of 10
millions
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million
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 US
dollars
 was noticed in that
France
 stood
of
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majority
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the majority
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 with $60
million
 . Probing
further
, the Austria show continues
upward
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the upward
an upward
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 trend from 2001 to 2005 and reached
at
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apply
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70 US
million
dollars
, surprisingly the amount spent on
book
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the book
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was
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slinghtly
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slightly
droppped
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dropped
in
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from
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 2001 to 2003
that
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was 82$ US
dollars
 in
millions
then
 dramatically climbed
at
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to
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 peak with roughly 95$
million
.
Moreover
, the expenses on
book
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books
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was
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slowly
grown
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grew
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 from 2001 to 2005 which
seem
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seems
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 at above 60$
million
 in Italy. In
France
,
money
 spent on bok was moderately
go
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up and observed around 70US
dollars
 in
millions
 from
last
 5 years.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words money, book, millions, dollars, france, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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