The pie charts show the amount of money that a Kazakh charity organization spent and received in 2019.

The pie charts show the amount of money that a Kazakh charity organization spent and received in 2019.
The pie chart gives information regarding the outcome and
income
financial of the
organization
of Kazakh Charity in 2019.
Overall
,
revenue
sources and expenditures have
a similar proportions
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which is dominated by one factor that contributed over 80% of the total proportion. Both
revenue
resources and expenditures are dominated by one sector that provides a big proportion
over
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80%. In
revenue
sources, donated food contributed a huge number namely 86,6%,
whereas
in expenditure is shown that program services spent money most, it was proven by percentage at 95,8%.
In addition
, Kazakh Charity organizations
also
received
income
from other sectors
such
as community distributions and program
revenue
of about 2%-10%.
Then
factors
such
as investment
income
, government grants and other kinds of
income
also
supported Kazakh Charity
Organization
at under 1%.
In addition
, even though
majority
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money of the
organization
is used for program services, there are still other factors that require
Organization
money. Those factors are Fundraising and Management and General with numbers 2,6% and 1,6% from total expenditure.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words income, organization, revenue with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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