In many countries, children are engaged in some kind of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong, while others consider it as valuable work experience, important for learning and taking responsibility. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

The practice of awarding
children
financially for their
labor
Change the spelling
labour
show examples
work is popular in many areas of
world
Add an article
the world
show examples
.
While
some
individual
Fix the agreement mistake
individuals
show examples
opposed
Wrong verb form
oppose
show examples
this
practice, others consider it as a worthy exposure, which can be vital in terms of getting
education
Add an article
an education
the education
show examples
and involves in maintaining
day to day
Add a hyphen
day-to-day
show examples
life
.
However
, I believe that one should encourage juveniles toward these lifelong experiences as they prepare them mentally for the upcoming challenges in future. In forthcoming paragraphs, I
am
Verb problem
will
show examples
discussing
Wrong verb form
discuss
show examples
both points of view in
details
Fix the agreement mistake
detail
show examples
,
while
, elaborating my opinion
in
Change preposition
on
show examples
this
matter. On one hand,
better
Add an article
the better
show examples
economic condition of a country and fostering skills development among
children
are the key benefits of these exercises
according to
many
people
Change noun form
people's
show examples
perspective
Fix the agreement mistake
perspectives
show examples
. They assume it to be not harmful
for
Change the preposition
to
show examples
the mental health of child nor in their
opinion
Add a comma
opinion,
show examples
it
effects
Replace the word
affects
show examples
their physical
wellbeing
Correct your spelling
well-being
show examples
. To wit, working at an early
age
provide
Correct subject-verb agreement
provides
show examples
them opportunity to master some field in
earlier
Add an article
an earlier
the earlier
show examples
era of their
life
,
also
, it raises the awareness of fulfilling their duties in
timely
Add an article
a timely
show examples
and productive manner.
For instance
, teenagers in many developing countries are being encouraged by their elders to start working
in
Change preposition
at
show examples
young
Add an article
a young
show examples
age
so that they can take part in
overall
Add an article
the overall
show examples
growth of their economy.
On the contrary
, beginning the job
at
Change preposition
in
show examples
early
Correct article usage
the early
show examples
years can limit
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
future opportunities, as it
effects
Replace the word
affects
show examples
their learning abilities. Expressly, it may
cease
Correct the spelling
seize
show examples
the opportunity
from
Change preposition
for
show examples
kids to visit schools daily.
As it
Correct word choice
It
show examples
is
common
Add an article
a common
show examples
viewpoint that one
need
Correct subject-verb agreement
needs
show examples
to spend full working hours in order to earn money. So, many kids lose the urge to gain more knowledge, whenever they start earning money
in
Change preposition
at
show examples
young
Correct article usage
a young
show examples
age
.
Furthermore
,
due to
the fact mentioned above chances to grow professionally in later stages of
life
decreases as well.
For instance
, in many areas of third world countries
children
are forced to earn financially, so they can support their families,
whereas
no facilities are given to them to tackle these situations. In my perspective,
juvenile
Fix the agreement mistake
juveniles
show examples
especially teenagers should be highly encouraged to start working at the earlier stages of their
life
Fix the agreement mistake
lives
show examples
,
while
also
providing them with
such
opportunities through which, they can grow in their educational institutions. These
endeavors
Change the spelling
endeavours
show examples
will build their characters strongly,
whereas
Correct word choice
and
show examples
polish
Change the verb form
polishing
show examples
them in becoming
expert
Fix the agreement mistake
experts
show examples
in certain areas of
field
Add an article
the field
show examples
. By developing their personalities, they will be able to lead their states with greater enthusiasm.
To conclude
,
children
in many parts of the world are engaged in work that are being paid financially. Some
thinks
Correct subject-verb agreement
think
show examples
that these practices should immediately be stopped as it
effects
Replace the word
affects
show examples
their education badly,
while
many people have
strong
Add an article
a strong
show examples
belief that it helps them not only in skill development but
also
in gaining knowledge for
future
Correct article usage
the future
show examples
.
However
, in my
opinion
Add a comma
opinion,
show examples
people should encourage them to start working
in
Change preposition
at
show examples
young
Correct article usage
a young
show examples
age
,
while
resuming their daily learning practices.
Submitted by araibbutt93 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Coherence & Cohesion
Ensure a clear logical structure of your essay by presenting ideas systematically and using appropriate transition words.
Coherence & Cohesion
Include a clear introduction and conclusion, ensuring they encapsulate the main points and your opinion succinctly.
Coherence & Cohesion
Support your main points with relevant and specific examples, and elaborate on them to enhance the argument.
Task Achievement
Provide a complete response to the prompt by thoroughly discussing both views and your own opinion, ensuring to cover all aspects of the question.
Task Achievement
Express your ideas clearly and thoroughly, providing comprehensive reasoning and perspectives on the topic.
Task Achievement
Use relevant, specific examples to back up your arguments and deepen the analysis of your points.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • Child labor
  • Exploitation
  • Minimum age
  • Work experience
  • Survival
  • Taking responsibility
  • Education
  • Poverty
  • Legal restrictions
  • Physical toll
  • Psychological impact
  • Cultural perceptions
  • International conventions
  • Economic impact
  • Work-study programs
  • Skilled labor
  • Unskilled labor
  • Developing economies
  • Moral implications
  • Professional development
What to do next:
Look at other essays: