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the pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel source in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000.

the pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel source in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000.
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The charts illustrate the production of
electricity
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 from
fuel
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 sources in two countries between 1980 and 2000.
Overall
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, the sources that were commonly used in Australia and France were coal and natural gas
while
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 the least
electricity
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 was the
fuel
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 source that was oil and natural gas.
It is clear that
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 coal
is mainly
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was the main
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sources
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source
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 that
were
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was
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 used in Australia in 1980, there was an uplift in 2000 from 50
units
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 to 130
units
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.
In addition
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, the highest source in Australia after coal was
hydro power
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hydropower
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, there was an increase from 20
units
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 to 36
units
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.
Also
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, nuclear power was not used as an
electricity
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 production
by
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apply
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fuel
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 source in the two years. The data reveals that
popular
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the popular
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fuel
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 for
the
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apply
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electricity
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 in France was nuclear power. There was a significant improvement from 1980 to 2000 from 15
units
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 to around 126
units
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.
However
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, coal peaked in 1980 but the items plunged to fewer than 25
units
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.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, fuel, units with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Electricity production
  • Fuel source
  • Renewable sources
  • Non-renewable sources
  • Significant change
  • Evolved
  • Dominant source
  • Introduction of new sources
  • Reliance
  • Electricity production mix
  • Environmental implications
  • Future trend
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