The plans below show the layout of a university’s sports centre now,and how it will look after redevelopment.

The plans below illustrate the layout of the university’s
sports
center
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now and the expected expansion of it after redevelopment.
Overall
, it can be seen that there is only a gym and a pool at
this
time, and it is set to extend to have more
sports
. There will be a leisure pool on the west of reception and it will have its
changing
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room. The
sports
shop
also
is predicted to be next to the new leisure pool’s changing room. Another changing room is going to be on the other side of the
sports
center
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for the new
sports
hall and the dance stations which are projected to be in the right corner of it. The cafe is on the opposite side of the
sports
shop on the east side of the entry. The gym is the only old one which is going to be changed and it will be much bigger.
However
, there will be a great extension on all sides of the
sports
center
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, the present one will not be destroyed.
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Coherence and Cohesion
To improve your score, make sure to have a clear introductory paragraph that paraphrases the task prompt, and a conclusion that summarizes the main points of your description. Adequately organizing your essay into logical paragraphs will also enhance coherence and cohesion.
Task Achievement
For task completion, make sure that all parts of the prompt are fully addressed and that your description covers all key features and changes planned for the redevelopment. Including more specific details and examples will enhance the quality of your response.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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