The diagrams give information about changes in a student accommodation building. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The diagrams give information about changes in a student accommodation building.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
The plans above illustrate the differences between a
student
accommodation house in 2010 and today.
Overall
, the main changes to the building
is
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are
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the expansion and renovation of the house, with the addition and removal of several rooms and facilities. In 2010, the main entrance was on the bottom left, which leads to a
hallway
. On the left side of the
hallway
, there is a
student
bedroom
and a bathroom. On the right side of the building, there are 2 other
student
bedrooms and a kitchen. Next to a
bedroom
, there is a living room.
Additionally
, the outside of the house is surrounded by 3 gardens. There
are
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were
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some changes in the structure of the building in 2010 and now. There were no changes to the main entrance. The en-suite room is added
at the end
of the
hallway
and can be accessed via the
student
bedroom
. On the left side of the
hallway
, similar to 2010, there is a bathroom and another
bedroom
. The kitchen will
also
function as a social place for students to entertain.
Additionally
, a garden is removed and a
student
bedroom
is added. On the bottom, the garden is replaced by a car park.
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