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The line graph below shows changes in the amount and type of fast food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000.

The line graph below shows changes in the amount and type of fast food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000.
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The graph details the
consumption
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 of junk food for teens in Australia over a
25
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year
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 period, between 1975 and 2000. Looking from an
overall
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 perspective, it is readily apparent that the
consumption
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 of
fish
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 and
chips
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 declined over the provided period,
whereas
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 the amount of pizza and hamburgers that were eaten increased. In 1975, the most popular junk food
with
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 Australian
adolescent
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adolescents
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 was
fish
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 and
chips
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, being eaten 100 times a
year
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.
This
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 was far higher than pizza and hamburgers, which were consumed approximately 5 times a
year
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.
However
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, apart from a brief rise again 1980 to 1985, the
consumption
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 of
fish
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 and
chips
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 gradually declined over the
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year
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 timescale to finish at just under 40 in 2000. In sharp contrast to
this
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, teenagers ate the other two fast foods at
much
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 higher level. Pizza
consumption
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 increased gradually until it overtook the
consumption
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 of
fish
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 and
chips
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 in 1990. It
then
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 levelled off from 1995 to 2000. The biggest rise was seen in hamburgers as the occasions they were eaten increased sharply throughout the
70's
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 and
80's
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, exceeding that of
fish
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 and
chips
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 in 1985. It finished at the same level as
fish
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 and
chips
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 began, with a
consumption
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 of 100 times a
year
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words consumption, year, fish, chips with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Consumption
  • Trend
  • Hamburgers
  • Pizza
  • Fried chicken
  • Period
  • Health awareness
  • Availability
  • Taste preferences
  • Marketing influence
  • Implications
  • Western culture
  • Peak periods
  • Promotions
  • Societal habits
  • Patterns
  • Popular
  • Declined
  • Introduction
  • Eating habits
  • Summarise
  • Prediction
  • Recommendations
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