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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The tables below give information about the world population and distribution in 1950 and 2000, with an estimate of the situation in 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The tables below give information about the world population and distribution in 1950 and 2000, with an estimate of the situation in 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The table
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demonstrates
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 demographic situation in
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different regions all over the world,
also
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2050
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 year. It is evident from the data that, there is an increase
of
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 human
number
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. Especially it can be seen in the example of Africa,
population
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the population
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 grew from 9 to 13
percent
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,
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 and
even
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 expected to increase
for
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 7
percent
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.
Overall
,
world
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the world
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population
 more than doubled,
moreover
, it is estimated that humanity will
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from
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 9 billion people in the future. It is interesting to note that among all regions only
africa
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Africa
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 will steadily increase in
number
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 of people, starting from 9
percent
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 and expected to have 20
percent
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. On
other
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the other
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 hand, In
asia
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Asia
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 was a peak in 2000, which
predicted
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 to be followed by a small decline. 22
percent
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 of
all
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 human
population
 was in
europe
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Europe
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 in 1950,
however
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 it had
decresed
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decreased
for
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by
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 10
percent
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per cent
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 by 2000. Both Latin America and Oceania had
incline
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an incline
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 in
population
,
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 but
prognosed
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proposed
 to remain the same as in 2000.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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