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The chart below shows the proportions of british students at one university in england who were able to speak other languages in addition to english,in 2000 and 2010.

The chart below shows the proportions of british students at one university in england who were able to speak other languages in addition to english,in 2000 and 2010.
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The pie chart describes the detail about the
british
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 learner who
speak
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different
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a different
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language
along with
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 in England specifically
in particular
university
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universities
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 from 2000 to 2010. Overview, the maximum
student
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number of students
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 speak Spanish only in both the given time period,
instead
 of other given
language
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languages
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. As per the provided information
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in 2000, the large proportion of pupil talk in Spanish was around 30% which was 5% more in 2010.
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language
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% in 2000,
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 it was almost half of it,in
next
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the next
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 given year. Surprisingly, the percentage was
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the same
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 for
student
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students
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 who spoke German only and two other languages
throughtout
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throughout
 the time with 10%. Moving towards to rest of
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, the
british
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 student able to speak
fransh
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French
 only
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15% in
former
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the former
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 year and 10% in
latter
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 year. Interestingly, the difference of 5% was noticed in another
language
 which highest was in 2000 .
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Vocabulary: Replace the words language with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bilingual
  • multilingual
  • proficiency
  • linguistic diversity
  • polyglot
  • language acquisition
  • second language (L2)
  • foreign language
  • fluency
  • working knowledge
  • mother tongue
  • language competence
  • language decline
  • cultural exchange
  • global language
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