The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002.

The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002.
The bar chart illustrates the total amount of
time
spent in
minutes
(
billions
) by three various types of
telephone
calls in the United Kingdom over the
years
from 1995 to 2002.
Overall
, the graph clearly states that
time
spent on
telephone
calls by national and international and mobile
call
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calls
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had increased over the
period
of
years
.
Whereas
, local
call
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calls
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had
became
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constant over the
period
of
years
with Little fluctuations. On the one hand, the total amount of
time
spent on national and international
telephone
calls
had
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increased gradually from 1995 to 2002 with above 30 to above 60
minutes
in
billions
.
Likewise
, mobile calls
had
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peaked over the
period
of
years
with below 10 to above 40
minutes
in
billions
from 1995 to 2002.
On the other hand
, number of
time
spent on local calls became constant over the
period
of
years
with
range
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of above 70
minutes
in
billions
with small fluctuations
in
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between the
years
1995 to 2002. At the same
time
, in 1997 and 2002 both national and international
telephone
calls and mobile calls shared
equal
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amount of
time
about above 40
minutes
in
billions
each respectively.
Moreover
, in 1999 local
calls
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time
duration reached its peak duration
about
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90
minutes
in
billions
whilst in 1995,
time
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consumed by mobile calls shared its lowest duration about below 5
minutes
in
billions
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words time, minutes, billions, telephone, years, period with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • total number
  • minutes
  • telephone calls
  • UK
  • divided into
  • categories
  • from
  • to
  • overall
  • increased significantly
  • local fixed-line calls
  • accounted for
  • largest proportion
  • throughout
  • period
  • international calls
  • highest rate of growth
  • experiencing
  • sharp increase
  • national long-distance calls
  • remained relatively stable
  • slight decline
  • towards
  • end
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