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Some people think that planting trees in open spaces in cities and towns is more important than building houses. to what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, the majority of
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people
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 believe that growing plants in open spaces in towns is more vital than
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constructing
 houses. In my opinion,
this
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trees
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 is more crucial because it
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 the town to be less polluted.
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 with, one of the main reasons why it is vital for
people
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 to plant
trees
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 in open spaces is because it
unables
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enables
 the environment to be well less polluted.
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 to say, if individuals in
cities
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 plant more plants in the empty areas, it will not only bring fresh air to the area but it will
also
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 make the place look more beautiful.
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, in the capital city of
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, the government passed a law
of growing
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 more
trees
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 in the city which helped
people
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 feel the freshness and reduced the air pollution of the city.
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, another reason why tree planting in
cities
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 is important is
due to
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 the fact that it acts as a relaxing place for some individuals.
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, some
people
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 enjoy sitting under different
trees
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 in
cities
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 in order to relax and think about different issues.
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, it acts as a recreational place for them.
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, research done at Bugema by Prof. John shows that
round
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 50% of individuals who stay in town enjoy relaxing under
trees
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 which
enable
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 them to rethink about themselves.
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, I strongly agree that we should grow more plants in towns and
cities
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. In conclusion, I agree with those who think that planting crops is very crucial than to
contruct
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construct
 buildings in town since it reduces air pollution and
people
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 are able to relax under them. In future, I hope the government will emphasize the law about planting
trees
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 in
cities
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.

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task achievement
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear main idea and that this idea is developed effectively; avoid overly general statements without support.
coherence cohesion
Work on the range of linking devices. Try to use a variety of cohesive devices and topic sentences to lead your reader through the essay more smoothly.
language
Pay attention to spelling, particularly the correct forms of words (e.g., 'unable' instead of 'unables'). Additionally, make sure to use the correct form of words (e.g., 'crops' should be 'trees' in the context of your essay).
task achievement
Refine your introduction and conclusion so that they clearly address the essay prompt, presenting your viewpoint directly and summarizing your main reasons in the conclusion.
task achievement
Develop your body paragraphs with specific examples; while you provided some, they need to be more detailed and better explained to demonstrate a thorough understanding of the topic.
coherence cohesion
Focus on paragraphing; ensure that each paragraph centers around one main idea and that the idea is thoroughly explored before moving on to the next.
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