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The diagrom shows the process by which sheep embryos are cloned. Summarise the infomation by selecting and reporting the main features.

The diagram gives information on the
sheep
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 embryo cloning
process
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.
Overall
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, there are
anumber
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a number
 of stages involved in
this
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process
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, ranging from extracting cells from different
sheep
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, combining
DNA
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 and
egg
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 cells, and resulting in lamb cloning results. To commence the cloning
process
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, there should be two different female
sheep
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. The body
cell
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 is taken from the first
sheep
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 (A),
while
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 the
egg
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cell
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 is taken from the second one (B), where the
DNA
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 should be taken from the proposed cloning species.
Subsequently
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,
DNA
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 from the body
cell
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 is
then
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 extracted and the nucleus is removed from the
the
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egg
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cell
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, becoming a medium for
DNA
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 development. Having undergone the extracting
process
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, the
DNA
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 from
sheep
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 A is fused with the
egg
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 cells from
sheep
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 B.
This
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 combined
cell
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 is put into the foster mother’s uterus, thereby developing the embryo.
Furthermore
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, after the embryo development
process
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, the new species will have been cloned which resembles
sheep
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 A whose
DNA
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 is used.

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introduction conclusion present
Make sure to present a clear introduction and a separate conclusion to encapsulate your summary of the diagram. The conclusion should briefly restate the overall process.
logical structure
Organize your ideas into clear, logical paragraphs. In this type of task, it would be beneficial to divide the process into clear stages and discuss them sequentially.
supported main points
For each stage of the process, provide a clear and detailed explanation. This will help to make your main points stronger and more supported. Use linking words to show the sequence of events clearly.
complete response
Ensure that you have fully completed the task by summarizing all key features of the diagram. Check that you haven't omitted any critical stages of the process.
clear comprehensive ideas
Work on expressing your ideas more clearly and comprehensively. Use a range of appropriate vocabulary to accurately reflect the process being described.
relevant specific examples
Use specific examples or details from the diagram where possible to illustrate the stages of the cloning process. This helps to make your response more relevant and concrete.

Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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