Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

As a student, you have the right to choose your own path, especially when talking about study-related.
However
, some
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of view
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that
students
need to take courses,
such
as science and
technology
that are beneficial for the
future
. I will discuss both perspectives and points supporting my belief in
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Firstly
,
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students
choose and plan their
future
is essential. We can’t speculate the
future
and there is a chance that their courses and jobs will be beneficial.
Moreover
,
for example
, if they face some difficulties in their study or workplace, they will have
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motivation to solve it as it is their own will that they may like. Seeing society nowadays, it is noticeable that more people are aiming to have a “work-life balance”,
therefore
they can live
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enjoyable and less stressful life.
Secondly
, the development of
technology
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significantly
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very fast. If
students
were instructed to choose courses related to
technology
, it will for sure have a great impact
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the
future
.
However
, something must
be consider
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the advantages sometimes do not outweigh the disadvantages. During their study, I think, it depends on their motivation. If they are in
the
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situation that
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of
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motivation, they tend to not finish their study well. Though
technology
are
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developing very fast, there is still a chance that artificial intelligence can replace
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. In conclusion, I prefer that
students
must choose their path by themselves as there may be several drawbacks if they are restricted. In my opinion, let
students
plan, and adults can give some advice to them, but not
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them.
Therefore
, they can develop well and
more
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motivated when problems come.
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Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure that your arguments are clearly presented and supported with relevant examples. Each paragraph should focus on one main idea and provide evidence or explanations to back it up.
Task Response
In the introduction, clearly state the topic and your opinion. In the body, develop both sides of the discussion with detailed points that are logically connected to each other and to your overall argument. Then, reiterate your opinion in the conclusion for clarity.
Coherence and Cohesion
Use a wider range of cohesive devices and transitions to link sentences and paragraphs together more effectively. This will enhance the overall flow of your essay.
Task Response
Provide specific and relevant examples to illustrate your points. These examples can be drawn from your own knowledge or experience, or from recognized studies and research.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • foster
  • engagement
  • excel
  • innovative contributions
  • diversity in research
  • well-rounded education
  • broad perspectives
  • critical thinking skills
  • mental well-being
  • burnout
  • forced academic paths
  • job-ready
  • skills shortages
  • tech-driven economy
  • employment rates
  • changing job market
  • utilitarian subjects
  • aptitudes
  • wasting talent
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