Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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As a student, you have the right to choose your own path, especially when talking about study-related.

However

, some

point

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of view

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that

students

need to take courses,

such

as science and

technology

that are beneficial for the

future

. I will discuss both perspectives and points supporting my belief in

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essay.

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students

choose and plan their

future

is essential. We can’t speculate the

future

and there is a chance that their courses and jobs will be beneficial.

Moreover

for example

, if they face some difficulties in their study or workplace, they will have

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motivation to solve it as it is their own will that they may like. Seeing society nowadays, it is noticeable that more people are aiming to have a “work-life balance”,

therefore

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enjoyable and less stressful life.

Secondly

, the development of

technology

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significantly

increase

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very fast. If

students

were instructed to choose courses related to

technology

, it will for sure have a great impact

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the

future

However

, something must

be consider

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the advantages sometimes do not outweigh the disadvantages. During their study, I think, it depends on their motivation. If they are in

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situation that

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motivation, they tend to not finish their study well. Though

technology

are

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developing very fast, there is still a chance that artificial intelligence can replace

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. In conclusion, I prefer that

students

must choose their path by themselves as there may be several drawbacks if they are restricted. In my opinion, let

students

plan, and adults can give some advice to them, but not

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them.

Therefore

, they can develop well and

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motivated when problems come.

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Coherence and Cohesion

Ensure that your arguments are clearly presented and supported with relevant examples. Each paragraph should focus on one main idea and provide evidence or explanations to back it up.

Task Response

In the introduction, clearly state the topic and your opinion. In the body, develop both sides of the discussion with detailed points that are logically connected to each other and to your overall argument. Then, reiterate your opinion in the conclusion for clarity.

Coherence and Cohesion

Use a wider range of cohesive devices and transitions to link sentences and paragraphs together more effectively. This will enhance the overall flow of your essay.

Task Response

Provide specific and relevant examples to illustrate your points. These examples can be drawn from your own knowledge or experience, or from recognized studies and research.

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

279 words

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