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The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
#show #percentages #meals #three #nutrients #summarise #information #features #comparisons
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The pie charts above
compares
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among
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the types of
nutrionts
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nutrients
 for each of the three meals a day,
as well as
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snacks
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.
Overall
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,
as
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we see that the types
sodium
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 and saturated fat
are
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achieved the
higest
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highest
number
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 in the dinner meal,
while
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in
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the type added sugar has the largest
number
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 of
snacks
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.
Additionally
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, the
sodium
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 content of lunch
meal
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meals
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 is 29%,
likewise
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, the saturated fat
contant
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contains
 other than
sodium
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,
however
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 the saturated fat
as
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is
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same
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the same
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 as added sugar in the
brakfast
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breakfast
 meal, but unlike
sodium
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. it is less.
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,
the
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sodium
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the
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 lowest percentage in
snacks
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also
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the
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saturated fat is less than added sugar.
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at
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in
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 the end, all of these may be unhealthy if eaten too much and
in
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the
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dinner has the largest
number
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 and the lowest
number
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 in breakfast and
snacks
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 of
sodium
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.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words snacks, sodium, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • nutrients
  • unhealthy
  • typical meals
  • percentages
  • saturated fats
  • fibers
  • sugars
  • impact
  • average
  • consumption
  • trends
  • breakfast
  • lunch
  • dinner
  • highest
  • lowest
  • variation
  • implications
  • balanced diet
  • recommendations
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