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The graph below shows the number of books read by men and women at Burnaby Public Library from 2011 to 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of books read by men and women at Burnaby Public Library from 2011 to 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph illustrates how many
men
 and women experienced
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reading
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books
from
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between 2011 and 2014 at Burnaby Public Library.
Overall
, the number of
books
 read by women gradually
growth
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 and and
men
 always significantly increased in certain
year
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years
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 and reached
peak
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a peak
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at the end
 of
period
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the period
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. From the start, in 2011 the
book
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number of books
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 read by
men
is
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was
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lowest
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the lowest
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 number
compare
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compared
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all
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 the data which is around 2000
books
. In the following years, in 2012
had
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there was
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rapid
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a rapid
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raise
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rise
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 became 4000. Only within a year from 2012 to 2023 go up sharply
in
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exact
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exactly
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 6000
book
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books
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was
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were
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 read by
men
.
An
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The
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 end year
also
 rose steadily to 12000 In 2011,
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women
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woman
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women
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reading
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read
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reading
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book
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books
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apply
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was
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above
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men
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man
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men
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 which is 5000
and
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followed by 2 years climb to 10000 in 2013. After 2013, it was bottom out to about 7000 in 2014. In 2013 either
men
 or women had the same number of
books
 that they read which
are
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 10000
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words men, books with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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