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the given graph shows the kain source of energy for USA in 1980 to 1990

the given graph shows the kain source of energy for USA in 1980 to 1990
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The pie
chard
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chart
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 given provides information about energy
production
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 from different
source
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sources
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 between1980
and
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apply
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1990 in
USA
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the USA
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Overall
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, oil constituted the main resource of
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energi
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energy
production
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 in both years,
while
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 hydroelectric
power
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producted
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produced
 the least
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energi
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energy
. There was
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a slighly
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slighly
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slight
increased
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 in
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production
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the production
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 of nuclear
power
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 and coal.
According to
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 the data, the amount of oil
production
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 in the USA accounted
42
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% in 1980 and dropped to 33% in 1990. The proportion of energy from hydroelectric
power
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 , on the
otther
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other
 hand,
remain
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 constant in both
year
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years
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 were similar at 5%. The
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energi
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energy
 generated by natural gas, which was the second major source of
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energi
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energy
 in the USA in 1980, fell by 1 % to a quarter of all
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energi
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energy
 produced in 1990.
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,
production
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 by coal went up from 225 to 27% in 1990.
Whereas
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 there was a 5% rise in
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energi
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energy
 from nuclear
power
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 to reach 10% in the second year.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words production, energi, power with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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