What do you think are the causes of this? What can be done to draw people's attention to art? The government's investment in arts, music and theatre is a waste of money. Governments should invest these funds in public services instead.

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task achievement
Ensure you are responding to the correct IELTS writing task prompt. The essay provided does not address the given topic related to the government's investment in arts and public services. Focus on answering the question directly and providing relevant examples to support your points.
coherence
Organize the essay with a clear introduction, body paragraphs that each introduce a new point, and a conclusion that summarizes the main points and restates your position. Maintain this structure throughout to improve coherence.
cohesion
Link ideas and sentences using a range of cohesive devices, such as conjunctions, pronouns, and linking words. This will help the reader to understand how your ideas are connected and create a more cohesive essay.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural identity
  • Societal values
  • Underfunding
  • Innovation
  • Cultural diversity
  • Community engagement
  • Social cohesion
  • Necessities
  • Enrichment
  • Tourism
  • Job creation
  • Urban revitalization
  • Educational programs
  • Heritage preservation
  • Public-private partnerships
  • National culture
  • Accessibility
  • Engagement
  • Digital platforms
  • Audience demographics
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