The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site.  Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The two maps tell us about the Norbiton industrial
area
and the prospects for its future development. One significant alteration is that all factories that currently occupy the industrial zone will be replaced by housing areas complemented by a shopping
area
, a playground, a school and a medical centre. Today’s Norbiton industrial
area
is bordered by a river and farmland in the north and a nearby town in the west. All factories are located on the southern side of the river alongside the main arteries and
roundabout
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that intersect with the roads towards the main entrance of the
area
. The industrial park is
also
connected by a highway that leads to a nearby town. In the future, the intersection in the main entrance of the
area
will be replaced by a smaller roundabout with shops and a nearby medical
area
. The main roundabout inside the
area
will get two adjacent roads going north and northwest respectively. There will be a housing
area
north of the river and adjacent to the main roads. A playground and school will be located at the intersection going north of the main road and on the east side of the
area
respectively.
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  • industrial area
  • planned future development
  • factories
  • warehouses
  • railway line
  • shopping center
  • residential buildings
  • college
  • mixed-use zone
  • commercial
  • residential
  • educational
  • green spaces
  • pedestrian walkways
  • housing
  • community
  • retail services
  • revitalize
  • quality of life
  • vibrant
  • sustainable
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