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The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.
#information #families #country #income
The following diagram illustrates
that
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how families in one country spent
money
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the money
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which
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they
earn
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earned
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 per
a
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week in 1968 and in 2018.It is obvious in 1968
family
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families
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 have more attention than other things.
According to
 the bar chart, In 1968 people used 35 percent of their income for food but in 2018 they spent nearly
three_ quarters
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three-quarters
 of their money for food. In 2018, families
prefered
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preferred
 to
spent
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spend
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 their revenue
for
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on
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entertainments
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entertainment
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,
20
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and 20
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percent
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per cent
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 of their revenue
was belonged
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belonged
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 to their spare
times
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time
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.
However
, In 1968 people spent slightly less than 10
percent
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per cent
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for
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on
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 their
entertainments
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entertainment
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.
Furthermore
, they
pay
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paid
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 attention more
for
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to
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 housing in 2018 than
1968
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in 1968
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.
overall
, the below chart demonstrates
that
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how families organize their weekly income for other things,
such
 as housing, food
or
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their
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leisure etc.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Weekly income
  • Expenditure
  • Consumption patterns
  • Cost of living
  • Discretionary spending
  • Inflation
  • Economic indicators
  • Demographics
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Technology advancements
  • Government policies
  • Consumerism
  • Lifestyle changes
  • Fiscal habits
  • Budget allocation
  • Financial priorities
  • Societal trends
  • Purchasing power
  • Income distribution
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