Queen Mary Hospital The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at Queen Mary Hospital since its construction in 1960. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

Queen Mary Hospital

The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at Queen Mary Hospital since its construction in 1960.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The maps depict the alterations taking place in Queen Mary Hospital
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changed, every 20 years. By and large, the hospital remained in the same position
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the period,
while
the features focused more on providing education functions and developing a cancer
centre
. As for the major changes in 1960 - 1980 of the hospital, the hospital greatly focused on deconstructing the shopping
centre
and farmland.
Shopping
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centre
was located west of the hospital
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and was replaced by a cancer
centre
and pharmacy.
In addition
, the farmland below the shopping
centre
was changed into where the nurses study. Compared to the 1980 to 2000 era, the cancer
centre
which was located at the west hospital was expanded into a bigger building like the letter of L
that is
still on the left side replacing the nursing school.
However
, the car park in the north area of the hospital was divided
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two sections,
nursing
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school and
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park itself.
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