Queen Mary Hospital The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at Queen Mary Hospital since its construction in 1960. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

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The maps depict the alterations taking place in Queen Mary Hospital

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changed, every 20 years. By and large, the hospital remained in the same position

along

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during

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the period,

while

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the features focused more on providing education functions and developing a cancer

centre

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. As for the major changes in 1960 - 1980 of the hospital, the hospital greatly focused on deconstructing the shopping

centre

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and farmland.

Shopping

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centre

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was located west of the hospital

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and was replaced by a cancer

centre

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and pharmacy.

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, the farmland below the shopping

centre

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was changed into where the nurses study. Compared to the 1980 to 2000 era, the cancer

centre

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which was located at the west hospital was expanded into a bigger building like the letter of L

that is

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still on the left side replacing the nursing school.

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, the car park in the north area of the hospital was divided

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two sections,

nursing

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the nursing

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school and

car

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the car

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park itself.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words centre with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 3 times.

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

159 words

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