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Some people think that universities should provide graduates with the knowledge and skills needed in the workplace. Others think that the true function of a university should be to give access to knowledge for its own sake, regardless of whether the course is useful to an employer. What, in your opinion, should be the main function of a university?

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There is an ongoing debate about the true purpose of undergraduate studies. For some, it is necessary for colleges to provide
students
 with
skills
 that are applicable for work later on in the real world. For others, college is a place for
students
 to simply gain knowledge from courses with not too much regard for their real-life applications. I believe that colleges are not merely a place for strict textbook learning. As a matter of fact, colleges can provide avenues for youth to explore many things and discover new insights about themselves that they might have not been able to do in high school. I think that the academic aspect of college should just focus on teaching
students
 about the syllabus. But when it comes to real-life
skills
,
students
 should be proactive and look for ways to learn about them from sources outside of the classroom. From my experience, I am a psychology student who discovered a passion for marketing through becoming a member of various extracurricular organizations. I wouldn’t
gain
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 these practical
skills
 if I had kept myself confined in the classrooms. To me, the main function of
university
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 is to help me obtain a formal degree that will give me
credibility
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 to work. Other than that, it
also
 provides a space for me to network and develop my
skills
 through organizations that will be a plus point for me to be hired by my employers. All in all, I view that the main function of
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a university
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 is to provide
students
 with both academic knowledge and practical
skills
 that are integral
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 the real world.
Students
 can access the former through classes, but for the latter, they can start exploring more non-academic opportunities.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Lifelong learning
  • Holistic development
  • Vocational training
  • Industry-specific competencies
  • Critical thinking
  • Creative problem-solving
  • Academic research
  • Intellectual development
  • Ethics and values
  • Societal contribution
  • Job market demands
  • Practical training
  • Internships
  • Knowledge advancement
  • Global challenges
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