The table illustrates secondary and high school teachers’ earnings in Australia, Denmark, Luxembourg, Japan and Korea in 2009.
The table shows the junior high school and senior high school teacher's revenue in several countries in 2009. In general, the salary has increased consistently in every
regions
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region
although
it is noticeable that Luxembourg's income has been far higher rather than others, the gap is expected to grow in the future. Looking at the details, the first largest earnings was hold
by Luxembourg where it started at 80.000 and Change the verb form
was held
grown
to 119.000 after approximately 15 years. Wrong verb form
grew
Whereas
, the second to be the fastest increase is
Japan, Correct your spelling
in
started
from only 34.000 to 65.000 in nearly 15 years. Change the form of the verb
starting
In contrast
with
Denmark Change preposition
apply
which
experienced a slow Correct pronoun usage
apply
rose
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rise
started
from 45.000 to only 54.000. Wrong verb form
starting
This
also
happens to Korea as well as
Australia, where korea's
salary has risen relatively slowly from 30.000 to 48.000, and Australia from 28.000 to 48.000. In conclusion, the data displayed a comparison of a country that has the highest income which is Luxembourg compared to Australia and Korea which has the slowest rise Change the capitalization
Korea's
on
its revenues.Change preposition
in
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