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The graph shows the amount of money spent on books in Germany, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005.

The graph shows the amount of money spent on books in Germany, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005.
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The line chart given illustrates the expenditure on books in various nations, namely
Germany
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, France, Italy, and Austria, over a ten-year period from 1995 to 2005. From an
overall
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 perspective, it is evident that the spending on books in all countries saw an upward trend.
In addition
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, the data on
Germany
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 remained
largest
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the largest
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 over the years shown.
In
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 the beginning of the period, the budget for books in
Germany
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 was
highest
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the highest
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, at $80
million
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. The figures for France and Italy were lower, at about $55
million
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 and $50
million
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, respectively. Australia,
however
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, accounted for the lowest number, at only $30
million
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. In the following years, after growing steadily to $90
million
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 in 1999, book sales in
Germany
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 fell slightly to around $85
million
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 in 2003 before increasing
further
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 to approximately $95
million
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 in the next two years.
Similarly
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, there was a gradual growth in the figure for France to about $75
million
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 in the final year.
Furthermore
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, the revenue from
publishing
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the publishing
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 industry in Italy underwent a fluctuating rise to around $62
million
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at the end
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 of the given period,
whereas
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 that of Austria witnessed a constant between 1999 and 2001, at $40
million
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, before rising to approximately $71
million
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 in 2005.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words germany, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditure
  • fluctuate
  • trend
  • peak
  • trough
  • correlation
  • digital reading platforms
  • socio-economic factors
  • initiatives
  • cultural influence
  • statistical data
  • purchasing habits
  • book industry
  • consumer spending
  • educational resources
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