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Most high-level positions in companies are filled by men even though the workforce in many developed countries is more than 50 percent female. So, some people suggest that companies should be required to allocate a certain percentage of these positions to women. To what extent do you agree ?

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 the domination of the whole world. It is commonly seen that high-ranking positions in companies are mostly male. It is agreed that proper allocation of management should be entitled to females.
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 of empathy to enforce cooperation and resilience to shoulder more responsibility to get through adversities will prove
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coherence cohesion
Develop the introduction more substantially with a clear thesis statement outlining your position. Use a wider variety of connectives and transitions to improve the logical flow of ideas.
coherence cohesion
Expand on the main points with more detailed explanations and relevant examples. Each paragraph should have a central idea that is explained and supported with specific information.
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Work on providing a more complete response to the task by addressing the prompt more directly and thoroughly. Discuss both sides of the argument, including reasons for your agreement or disagreement.
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Use examples that are more specific and relevant to the topic; they should clearly illustrate the point you are trying to make and be directly connected to the argument.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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