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The three pie charts below the changes in annual spending by a particular uk school in 1981,1991 and 2001. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparions where relevent.

The three pie charts below the changes in annual spending by a particular uk school in 1981,1991 and 2001. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparions where relevent.
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burning
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world
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Education
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education
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believed
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children
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born baby
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the below
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 paragraph. Nowadays,
school
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schools
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 and colleges are
most
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 important in
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world
.
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 are most useful in our country and city.
Children
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 a lot of information and general knowledge in their
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school
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teaching
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believe
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studies
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foremost
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teched
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relative
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believed
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not good for our
children
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 wrong information and wrong habits to our
youngstars
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youngsters
young stars
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people
. As a reason, many schools and
study
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class
classes
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provided
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their
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girl and boy. Some schools and
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colleges
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climate
 and ambience not good.
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claes are
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children
, bad
people
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school
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not
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the student
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student
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students
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.
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 conclusion, some
people
 and society
belived
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believe
 that
education
 is good for our generation. Some humans trust that
study
 is not good for our
baby
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babies
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. In my opinion
school
education
 is good for
our
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 next generation and they
teched
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teach
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 good
idea
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ideas
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 and
lenguge
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length
 to our sons.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the first paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words world, education, people, study, children, school with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "provided" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the first paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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